starlightsaoirse

i liked the way her dad told it too. :) honestly? she sounds a little like you... you might try... like, in future? once you get an idea more of who she is, altering her patterns for that. i mean, hey, we all tend to write our characters *like* ourselves. but it's a thought. (this, darling, is why i avoid dialogue like the plague when writing. best to not give them a voice at all than risk them all sounding alike)

oo. i like it when you go not in order. if you have a general outline of where the plot is, then you can do all the exciting parts and then fill in later as needed.